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Wow i must say i did not enjoy the poem at all if its a poem, your puntuations were too much and misplaced. The idea of the "poem" was blunt ...

Hi your poem is beautiful there is nothing worst than growing up and leaving ones childhood friend. But your first stanza and the rest part of the poem were different ...

Welcome first of all to YWS, and the best way to start is to review 3 work of others before you post. Your introduction before the poem wasn't necessary and ...

I enjoyed ur story it was beautiful your description was clear. But for next time sake when describing the action of a character its better in a bracket not an ...

That was a good poem....oh sorry monologue....did i say monologue i meant script......SCRIPT!! That didn't even pass for a scri talkless of script. It would be better if it was ...

What am it to critique in this poem is the concept which i dont think make sense at all, a poem should be clear with few words but what i ...

When will I die? How will I die? Will I see my grand children? or will I bore no child? Will I die in pride or in shame? Will those ...

I loved the poem but it would have been better if it was a descriptive eassy. You description is too detail and it lost the flow of poetry

I think the story is beautiful i definetly need cindy. But i still did not see the rythm and puntuations would have easy things, i read thru it like a ...

First i must welcome you to YWS and taking the courage to write a post, you did well. But i must confess your poem needs a lot of puntuation, and ...

Your poem is beautiful to the ears your choice of words were perfect. But what is the focus of the poem? Is it to describe "Carolyn sweetness" to us? (stanza ...

Mysterious woman should be your title, work on the correction given by lilc and increase the lenght of the poem a bit

First thing first you have been advice to check out script writting forums, but you have to also noted is that the character name doesn't change what the hell is ...

I really relate with the story cause i am currently in Tyler's position. I like the way Tyler showed remorse when mentioning Jens name it shows that he still has ...

You did a nice job with your story. The formating aspect has been covered. But then your transition between emotions was cold. Like after the service man assume the girl ...